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ranunculus ([personal profile] ranunculus) wrote in [personal profile] watervole 2025-02-18 04:44 pm (UTC)

The website functions well, from what I see, but it REALLY needs a good editor. I read most of the "About Us" page. Almost every paragraph starts with the word "we". Rewording those sentences may make them much more compelling.

For example:
We have many skilled people who can provide support on more specific aspects of the hobby, such as making authentic clothing.

Authentic techniques for making period costumes and props are a specialty of our group. Members happily share them with anyone interested.

Your discoveries with the cowl and shawl are really interesting.

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